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| dabigboss |
Oct 18 2009, 08:32 AM
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Member Group: Support: Veteran Merchant Posts: 6,513 Joined: 13-January 05 From: Wandering Member No.: 797 |
Maisy painted up her first Marines yesterday while the two young boys were doing their Orks & Marines.
So she had her first game today. Pink Marine Vs. Blue Marine Both Marines advance together simutaneously. Pink Marine says to Blue Marine "hello, what do you want?" BM to PM "i want to shoot you" PM to BM "but i am a good guy" BM to PM "so am i" Hand to hand combat ensues. BM wins. -------------------- |
| Starfire |
Oct 18 2009, 09:15 AM
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Good story over all, some nice ideas there to make you think about life, especially as both the space marines are good guys but they have to destroy the other... However, next time I think you story would be improved by including more character development, and some plot hooks to draw the read in. Keep them guessing for that critical second sentence.
What happens in the next episode? -------------------- |
| YogoZuno |
Oct 18 2009, 09:39 AM
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Photos, or it didn't happen. And no maps or diagrams? Shame on you!
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| waargh |
Oct 18 2009, 10:12 AM
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![]() Member ![]() Group: Veteran Members Posts: 4,516 Joined: 14-December 04 From: Footscray, Melbourne Member No.: 633 |
Photos, or it didn't happen. And no maps or diagrams? Shame on you! when you step thru 2 the ol dirty bastard, brooklyn ZOO! -------------------- |
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